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Capital Deiscount Bedding Flash Redesign

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Flash redeign
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5100x3300px 3.19 MB
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I can't say your design is the best I've seen but it's certainly a huge improvement compared to the old design. The typography in the bottom half of your design could be improved. The tracking of "Staying in bed feels" should be higher, I would advise to extend the horizontal bar in /t, the leading between "Staying in bed feels" and "on a" is much too high, "better" is too big, "Capital discount bedding" should be vertically centered on the blue space or at least be moved down, and "Push here 4 savings" is way too chaotic.

Did you have to use that geometric font or did you select it yourself? I would avoid using a font with such small horizontal bars in /f and /t and the /s is unusually condensed. I don't think it was a good idea to use two different geometric typefaces on one design either. The grotesque, the italic serif and just one geometric typeface would be more than enough. By adding more fonts it's hard to avoid making the design look chaotic and unprofessional.